please revise this small essay

[Chitman]

Thanx a lot to the both of you... I really appreciate your help.

[Andy Z]

OK:

• Never start a sentecne with "but", "and", or "because" (you can start a sentence w/ because, if you know what you're doing.)
• Indent the first line of every paragraph.
• Dont't list items using ":". Use transistions (firstly, secondly, lastly, etc.)
• Do not use contractions, abbreviations, dead words, run on sentences, or comma splices.
• .................

Not all of the following was found in your paper above, and the rules I listed are for formal essays (which should be at least 3 pages).

* Goes back to compare/contrast essay, due tomorrow. *

[CeleronXT]

Some techniques that I use to reduce stress: Making music, weight lifting, and praying.

I would definetly fix that line, as it's not even a sentence like that. I would go more along the lines of "Making music, lifting weights, and praying are some techniques that I use to reduce stress."